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== first round comments

OH MAN I LIKE IT

The "box" motif is lovely - and since we're putting the Jam kit in a box, we can totally reuse this for all the future Jam events. I would...

• change the large top centered heading, "Pilot in A Box" to "Grassroots Jam New York", with a much smaller (1/3 - 1/4 the size) italic row of text underneath it saying "Help us build a Pilot in A Box kit"
• delete the second instance of large text "Pilot In A Box" (on the bottom right-ish)
• Remove the two XO-dude logos on the bottom-left and right - the idea is cool, I wonder if we can find a different place for them that doesn't unbalance the composition as much? Maybe have one of them (whichever you deem the most relevant) springing from the "box" at top, tilted a little askew, layered on top of the blurring OLPC logo.
• I love the two-column layout. Can the text columns be made more even/rectangular? (Basically, ignore my random insertion of newlines in the text and let it flow into the layout.)
• Leave the bottom 150px or so empty (bump the bottom of the text up so that it clears the area where the heads of the XO-guys are now) so we can put sponsor logos there, in general
• Specifics for bottom-right (transparent light green box, 2x font compared to main body?)

Saturday, June 14: 10am - 10pm
Sunday, June 15: 10am - 6pm
Judging & open expo: Sunday 3-6pm

537 West 59th st (Columbus Circle)
For more information or to apply, see
http://wiki.laptop.org/go/Grassroots_Jam

Mchua 09:57, 31 May 2008 (EDT)